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Critique requested

I'm experimenting with a new series of photographs...

You can find the first one here: Office Day

Tell me what you think. Is it too much in one picture? Is it too confusing? Too small? Too cluttered? Should I use a neutral background instead?

Go ahead, give it to me! :)

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amarissia
Jan. 31st, 2011 03:09 pm (UTC)
It is a bit cluttered, but it's got lots of personality.
ravensilver
Jan. 31st, 2011 03:16 pm (UTC)
Cluttered? Hm... Maybe a neutral background instead?
amarissia
Feb. 1st, 2011 03:17 pm (UTC)
Yeah, I think a neutral background will tone it down a bit, and make it easier to focus on the rest of the picture.
jo_mako
Jan. 31st, 2011 05:42 pm (UTC)
amarissia Summed up my initial impression of it. Cluttered was the first word that came to mind. Ooo try it with it a neutral background, maybe that would be less jarring visually than the suggestion I posted in my critique.

Edited at 2011-01-31 05:43 pm (UTC)
ravensilver
Jan. 31st, 2011 07:07 pm (UTC)
I'll re-do it and try to unclutter it.

Thank you for posting a critique on it at DA! <3
jo_mako
Jan. 31st, 2011 07:15 pm (UTC)
No worries, and I'm glad you found it useful!

mirien
Jan. 31st, 2011 06:12 pm (UTC)
Tiny bit cluttered, although I rather like that. Damn, I LOVE seeing the space where other people work, makes me feel I know them a little bit better. OH AND I WANT YOUR ORANGE STAR MUG.

That um, wasn't very helpful critique-wise, was it?

Edited at 2011-01-31 06:15 pm (UTC)
ravensilver
Jan. 31st, 2011 07:05 pm (UTC)
*ggg*

Cluttered seems to be the consensus. I'll try re-arranging the pics to make them clearer...

*gg* My orange star mug? That's part of a series of mugs with different designs. ^^ I'm not sure they're available in the UK. They're produced by Cha-Cult. But I don't think that these exist anymore. Unfortunately, since some of them have lost their handles... ;__;

*gg* It was just fine. Thank you. ^^
kracken
Jan. 31st, 2011 10:18 pm (UTC)
Let me try... Let's see... You have to emphasize your focal point more and the bottom right square with the tape measure isn't balanced. It's the wrong size. The squares shouldn't overwhelm your focal, but dance around it as if they are holding it against the surface.
lil_1337
Feb. 1st, 2011 03:35 am (UTC)
It's interesting, but for me it was a bit overwhelming trying to take everything in at once.
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