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Writing style question

I'm typing away madly, but while doing so, I'm trying to improve my style at the same time. To do this, I've been looking at the way some of my favourite authors write and I've noticed that they tend to avoid the "-ing" form, using the more present forms of verbs instead.

Let me illustrate:

Instead of "pulling himself closer", I read "he pulled himself closer". Instead of "Opening the door with one hand", I read "he opened the door with one hand".

I understand that the second version makes the action much more immediate. My question is: is it permissible to occasionally use the "-ing" form, mixed in with the others, or is that totally jarring and bad style?

*hoping for clarification*

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