I've started an original Yaoi story, that I might want to work into our publishing program later - but only if it's good enough. I'd like to post it here in parts and ask for your feedback on it.
Don't hold back. I can take criticism, as long as it's constructive - i.e. helping me make it better. I need not so much grammar, spelling and punctuation corrected (that comes much later), but rather content feedback. Am I telling a story, or are you bored to tears...?